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ShoePie
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Decided to remove, Sorry.
 
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EDIT: Comment removed as it related to a question I no longer need to ask. :)
 
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The joke rate was good and fast.

For the penultimate line, I would have written, "But because you're clearly insane, let's call it £30m" or something.
 
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Thanks Kevin.
 
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Liked the premise and the girls line, very good.

As the entire Jackson clan is practically bankrupt, I'd have played with that a little more, with the promoter trying to reason the cost of the stage show and the other Jackson's trying to get in on the act.
 
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Hey ShoePie

Feels a bit long. I think you need to find one aspect of the show and stick to that as it feels a bit all over the place at the moment.

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