I have to agree with Mark, I think Lead Balloon should be a prophetic title for it. There were too many passages of unfunny dialogue, and they gave away the cafe owner knowing about the cake before they entered the shop. Perhaps it would have been funnier if the owner was dissing Dee without Dee realising why until he reads the paper and the penny drops. The other way around, you knew what was happening.
The best character for me was the interfering whispery shop assistant at the baby store. She was at least nicely observed. although the cleaner was next in line. But surely when minor characters leap out that says something about the major characters?
The plot wasn't staggering although i thought the end was an improvement as they began to pile the troubles on Dee. However, a funnier end may have been to have the people he'd offended banging on his front door for a showdown as he tried sneaking out back. Straight into the waiting hard guy who'd been to prison.
Jack Dee was just being Jack Dee. He wasn't the much-publicised "Rick Spleen", or else Rick Spleen makes his living as a Jack Dee impersonator. It's like the anti-drugs video Rik Mayall once did that announced a 'great new character' and it was just rik mayall being the same character he's been throughout his career in YOnes / Filthy Rich (now that was a great show) / Bottom / Paradiso. There was nothing new in Dee's characterisation (if there was any characterisation) to warrant a name other than Jack Dee
The handwritten interludes were nice but often just repeated a joke.
It needs to get more jokes in to warrant being called a sit-com. And more plot. I'll almost guarantee that if one of us had sent in that script to the Beeb, we'd be reading a rejection slip.
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